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    dots Submission Name: In the Darkdots
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    Author: Jesimine
    ASL Info:    19/female/australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 64/96/20
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I don't really know what this is all about what are some of your thoughts on what it is?


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    dotsIn the Darkdots
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    Sitting alone in the dark,
    What do you see?
    Do you see nothing?
    Do you see darkness?

    Is there someone there?
    Are you all by yourself?
    Do you feel their eyes?
    Do you feel their breath?

    I see shadows gliding across the room,
    I see darkness that is darker than that,
    I feel their eyes staring at me there,
    I feel their breath as though they are everywhere.

    Is it make believe?
    Just imagination?
    Do you really see them?
    Or are you hallucinating?

    No-one really knows,
    Because you only see them when alone,
    You only see them when it's dark,
    You only feel them when it's dark.




    Submitted on 2006-07-19 12:46:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This Is cool I like the way you wrote something ......the only word I can think of is "blindly" and had the reader decide what it was all about . To me it meant the soul of all those who suffer and die everyday, when we are awake in the daytime and everyones awake society tells us to concentrate on ourselves and not worry about everyone else but when we are "alone" sometimes we are forced to think of them.

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    James

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    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the feeling of doubt and oppression this poem gave me...the fact of feeling their breath on you is a very nice image!

    Ally
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Ligeia83 | [ Reply to This ]
      It also made me imagine like you were surrounded by vampires...

    Ally
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Ligeia83 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this alot i like the darkness especially on a lake that is shadowed by the moon
    what you see or hear lays in your imagination
    this piece is good because mostly everyone has a friend or fear when darkness falls

    well done

    sandman
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]



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