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    dots Submission Name: Sadiedots

    Author: Amberger
    ASL Info:    13/f/earth
    Elite Ratio:    1.9 - 49/85/24
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Story/Comedy
    Total Views: 1013
    Average Vote:    1.0000
    Bytes: 587


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    one day i was
    at the trailer
    at my aunts
    trailer and she
    let my dog
    sadie off the
    leash and sadie
    ran away
    my sis was
    chasing her
    and sadie
    ran through a swamp
    and my sis
    caught her
    then we
    realized that
    she was really
    dirty so we
    had to wash
    her my sis
    had to hold on to
    her collar while
    we sprayed her
    so my sis
    got really wet
    but the good
    thing is that
    we caught her

    Submitted on 2006-07-19 14:17:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know what struck me about this poem but I thoroughly enjoyyed it. It put a peaceful thought in my mind, and it was like I was there with your sis and the dog and the swamp lol. good one!
    | Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by BlueHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      This was cute. I think it would have looked better if you put all the words together, but I shouldn't be telling you how to write.
    I liked the part where your sister got really wet. I also have a sister and I just love to pull little pranks on her. The other day, I sprayed her with the garden hose when she wasn't looking Again, good poem.
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I really, really liked this poem and I am trying to figure out what it did for me. But I loved the simplicity of it and I dunno, I really just enjoyed the broken style. I think I will add this to my favorites.

    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Guernica | [ Reply to This ]
      Good job but I think that, like PiperH said, it would be a bit bettre if you made it so that there wasn't a space between every two lines. I think that would make it feel more complete. Other than that, I really enjoyed it and I hope that you continue writing about your fasanating life. Again, Good Job.
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      This was simple, but I did not like the format and style in which you carried this out. This would've been better is a story, don't you think?
    Overall, this could be greatly improved with use of better vocabulary, and perhaps another layout.

    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

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