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Love's Erotic Dream


Author: LadyMustang
ASL Info:    42, female, West Virginia
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Words: 171
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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Love's Erotic Dream



" Love's Erotic Dream"

I want to tease you
I want to please you
I want to show you
My love is true.

I want to kiss your
Lips so sweet, I
Want to sweep you
Off your feet.

I want to feel the essence
In your soul, My body
Wants to feel yours out of
Control.

I want to show you baby
That I need you, I want to
make your dreams come
True.

I want to let you feel my
Fire, I want to make your
Flames burn higher.

I want to take you right
Out of your dreams, My
Love wants to hear your
Passions scream.

I want to treat you like a
King, I want to give to you
all I am everything.

I want to take your ecstasy
To the top, I want to keep
Going til your body says
Stop.

Written By: Wilma S. Hill

copyright@2006 Ladymustang's Poetry




Submitted on 2006-07-19 15:12:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is terriffic, Wilma! I love your lovemaking poetry (and all of the rest of your work, as well)!!!
| Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey Wilma

Nice one!!

Everyone longs for the sensation of true passion and you have captured that quite well in this piece.

I particularly like this stanza:

'I want to feel the essence
In your soul, My body
Wants to feel yours out of
Control.'

It tells the reader that this passion knows no bounds and that the pair want to give everything to this lustful moment.

Good work

Love it a lot

'On On'

Ocker
| Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Ocker7290 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was really good. A truely erotic poem, with good use of words. You have quite a way with words. Good write, really hot and sensual. Keep it up

Cami
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi! This poem reminds me of my poem "Feeling You", if you have the time someday, read it. I loved this, it very passionate, sexual and erotic in a subtle and "comfortable" way. In terms of writing, I noticed you repeated "I want to" many times, which didn't really bother me, but it could be changed. My favorite part is: "I want to take you right
Out of your dreams, My
Love wants to hear your
Passions scream." That's very intense! and I love it. I liked the way you had with words. Keep it up!
| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by April0414 | [ Reply to This ]
  Is it getting HOT in here!?! WOW! This was very erotic and sometimes out of control? I like reading your poem you never know what your going to read? Thanks for the read!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good
You ventured into the erotic with this write
I really like hoiw you did not go to far in describing just what a beautiful sexual relationship would be like
That is a credit to you
I enjoyed this
I Look forward to reading more new writes from you
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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