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    dots Submission Name: Love's Erotic Dreamdots
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    Author: LadyMustang
    ASL Info:    42, female, West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 222/171/71
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsLove's Erotic Dreamdots
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    " Love's Erotic Dream"

    I want to tease you
    I want to please you
    I want to show you
    My love is true.

    I want to kiss your
    Lips so sweet, I
    Want to sweep you
    Off your feet.

    I want to feel the essence
    In your soul, My body
    Wants to feel yours out of
    Control.

    I want to show you baby
    That I need you, I want to
    make your dreams come
    True.

    I want to let you feel my
    Fire, I want to make your
    Flames burn higher.

    I want to take you right
    Out of your dreams, My
    Love wants to hear your
    Passions scream.

    I want to treat you like a
    King, I want to give to you
    all I am everything.

    I want to take your ecstasy
    To the top, I want to keep
    Going til your body says
    Stop.

    Written By: Wilma S. Hill

    copyright@2006 Ladymustang's Poetry




    Submitted on 2006-07-19 15:12:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is terriffic, Wilma! I love your lovemaking poetry (and all of the rest of your work, as well)!!!
    | Posted on 2006-12-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Wilma

    Nice one!!

    Everyone longs for the sensation of true passion and you have captured that quite well in this piece.

    I particularly like this stanza:

    'I want to feel the essence
    In your soul, My body
    Wants to feel yours out of
    Control.'

    It tells the reader that this passion knows no bounds and that the pair want to give everything to this lustful moment.

    Good work

    Love it a lot

    'On On'

    Ocker
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Ocker7290 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good. A truely erotic poem, with good use of words. You have quite a way with words. Good write, really hot and sensual. Keep it up

    Cami
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by camoflage | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi! This poem reminds me of my poem "Feeling You", if you have the time someday, read it. I loved this, it very passionate, sexual and erotic in a subtle and "comfortable" way. In terms of writing, I noticed you repeated "I want to" many times, which didn't really bother me, but it could be changed. My favorite part is: "I want to take you right
    Out of your dreams, My
    Love wants to hear your
    Passions scream." That's very intense! and I love it. I liked the way you had with words. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by April0414 | [ Reply to This ]
      Is it getting HOT in here!?! WOW! This was very erotic and sometimes out of control? I like reading your poem you never know what your going to read? Thanks for the read!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good
    You ventured into the erotic with this write
    I really like hoiw you did not go to far in describing just what a beautiful sexual relationship would be like
    That is a credit to you
    I enjoyed this
    I Look forward to reading more new writes from you
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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