Hi! This poem reminds me of my poem "Feeling You", if you have the time someday, read it. I loved this, it very passionate, sexual and erotic in a subtle and "comfortable" way. In terms of writing, I noticed you repeated "I want to" many times, which didn't really bother me, but it could be changed. My favorite part is: "I want to take you right Out of your dreams, My Love wants to hear your Passions scream." That's very intense! and I love it. I liked the way you had with words. Keep it up!
This is really good You ventured into the erotic with this write I really like hoiw you did not go to far in describing just what a beautiful sexual relationship would be like That is a credit to you I enjoyed this I Look forward to reading more new writes from you God Bless Ron