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    dots Submission Name: A Rosedots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsA Rosedots
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    its beauty is unimaginable
    yet it bleeds
    the blood of all
    all who were lost in this world
    this world
    so beautiful

    its beauty is unimaginable
    yet it bleeds
    the blood of all
    all who were lost in this world
    this world
    so dark

    it is a bleeding rose
    in a world of beauty
    surrounded by darkness




    Submitted on 2006-07-19 15:52:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what's up sunshine.... I am glad that I've been able to share my poetry with you and yours with me... this site makes me happy... I was incredibly intimidated at first because writing to me is so personal and I don't typically share it with anyone.... but my friend told me I should post my stuff and I did. and I am glad... your comments have made me confident and feel a little more at ease with the whole thing..... but onto your brilliant work.... I really like the duality that you establish in the world with both the beauty and the darkness.... also I like the concept of a rose... it also has the duality with beauty and then the thorns. which for some reason when i get roses I know there are thorns but I am too enchanted with the rose to remember until i get pricked. - I think that your poem it's a spiritual level for me.... I really think you did a great job with this one...



    p.s. you rock :o)
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by Cuylia | [ Reply to This ]
      heyyyy you put ur lines in.sweeeeeeeeeeeeet
    | Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      It's very nice and all, but I think in your last stanza first line, I think you meant 'bleeding rose' instead of 'bleed rose'. If not, could you explain please? Anyway, I liked how you seemed to repeat the first stanza twice but at each end one says that the world is beautiful and one says that the world is dark. Which is true, it is a very beautiful and dark place, this world, but is it beautifully dark, or darkly beautiful? Hmm...that's an interesting question. Maybe you could make another write trying to answer that question, that would be interesting. Well, I seem to rambling on here, sorry bout that, but nice job.

    *tox*
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, surrounded by darkness. You are right and in line with what I say.
    This world is both dark and beautiful. If you go into it, you remain there for some time and find nothing like a Rose if you you come out soon.
    But if you stay for a while, see the new faces feel the nature, somewhere you'd find a garden where there are birds and some other beauties around. If you go into it, there are flowers welcoming you. And if you never hurt these, one day you find a smallest bud somewhere giving out a rose. That moment when you see it, is precious and only for you for you were good to nature. Instead, if you do hazardous activities your bare foot comes under the same rose stem. This was all I was thinking while reading this piece.
    You must frame it in your garden, may you'll find thousands of roses around you the very next day.

    Keep writing,
    SHK
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by shikhar_mall | [ Reply to This ]


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