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    dots Submission Name: Realizationdots
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    Author: GothamFreak
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 110/48/19
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsRealizationdots
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    you are not who I thought you were
    maybe it was just too foggy
    or maybe I was just blind
    but the fog has cleared
    and my vision is restored
    your deceit
    your lies
    they are all visible nowand I realize
    you are not who I thought you were
    and you never will be




    Submitted on 2006-07-19 15:54:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This isn't very original, and it doesn't have much going for it. It is plain and simple. It does seem rather raw. Just one of those writes that you write to get feelings out of your system. It is very relatable. I can understand where you are coming from, and so can everyone else probably. But you should probably try to reformat this and add some specifics. Maybe some imagery.
    LeAnna
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]
      dude that was so straight to da point and awsome.is short and nice and i so dig it.
    good job freak.


    Da Grim Reaperessss
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]


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