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    dots Submission Name: Not Supposed To, But Of Coursedots

    Author: FarawayFeelings
    ASL Info:    16/F/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 159/74/72
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 989
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Its kinda metaphorical, though it can be viewed literally and still maek alot of sense...what do you think?

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    dotsNot Supposed To, But Of Coursedots

    Kisses aren't supposed to turn to ice, and loudly break away.

    Words aren't supposed to resound sounds and give no seismic impact.

    And people in love shouldn't be separated, not by words or people, or even by distance.

    The kid was around sixteen, too young to buy cigarettes. The store clerk was no stickler for the rules, but he was between making a buck and losing his liscence; and between giving the kid his release, and taking some moral stand.

    The clerk thought this through, as the kid stood there in front of the counter, relaxed and slightly agitated. The bulbs above blinked, 'Gotta change that,' the clerk reminded himself. Though he knew he would never get around to it.

    He slid the pack across the counter, and the money lay a few inches behind, the man taking action still not sure what he would do. Until the kid finally said, "You know that's okay, you think you could sell me the gum though?"

    Submitted on 2006-07-19 17:17:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really interesting, in a good way. I liked it, it was both metaphorical and literla. I liked it, the details and words fit together and added to the picture. Good job, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]

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