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Lust, Hurt and Broken Hearts

Author: iluvpoetry_1
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Words: 78
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Love
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this very very very very OLD!!!!!!! and yall aint proably gonna read this and bother me about bein 2 sad and some crap like that!! ITS OLD!!! OLD OLD OLD!

Lust, Hurt and Broken Hearts

Love what is this feeling that people talk so highly about? How can you love someone you've never touched? How can you touch someone you've never loved?

Lust the feeling of darkness. Diguised by blisfull emotions. Emotion of passion later covered with hurt. Constant drama. Constant pain.

Why doesn't anything go the right way. Every guy after every guy. Everytime I feel like this my life spins out of control. This is not working!

Submitted on 2006-07-19 19:13:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Awe this is cute! Very imaginative and creative! I felt the same way once but let go cause I knew there was nothing going to happen they looked at me as a friend so nicely written yet sad enough to feel.
| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it a lot. I tihnk that it could have been classified more under Random Thoughts than Poetry, but other than that I don't know how you could make it better. Good Job. Love is hard to deal with. Good job and Keep up the great writing and stuff.
| Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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