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    dots Submission Name: i hate them for what they've done to youdots

    Author: whispered_chaos
    ASL Info:    15/f./cincinnati ohio
    Elite Ratio:    6.8 - 151/94/48
    Words: 385
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsi hate them for what they've done to youdots

    biting down on my lip, bleeding love
    dripping into your mouth honest trust,
    awakening your nightmares treacherous-
    watching you cry, almost scandalous,
    gingerly tripping over your fears
    sucking the sadness away from your mind,
    brainwashing incubus, silkily decieves-
    holding onto the falsehoods they made you believe.
    tearing apart your happiest moments
    and clothing your ecstasy in loathing horror,
    why can you lie to me, tell me you're fine,
    when deep inside i hear your heart whine?
    they suck the scum from the devil's feet
    they force you to suck for their horrid pleasure
    ripping out your innocence-leaving you beaten
    with memories smelling like the shit you've eaten.
    cut them so deep and watch them bleed black
    for torturous nights that you cried all alone,
    reach into their throats-make them whimper-
    you try to fight back but your body gets limper.
    strangle them with vengefulness
    and trod on their rancid newly dug graves,
    they choke you until your face turns white-
    beat you down no matter how hard you fight.
    hammered soul lies dead on the floor
    and your body is close to death too,
    willing them to die they just get stronger-
    all you can think is, "how much longer!"
    walls falling down on top of your chest
    with rasping breaths you beg for mercy,
    you cry and they hear you, tell them to cease,
    nothing you do makes the pain decrease.
    crumbling under their maddened pressure
    bleeding and crying, dominated-
    you tremble and cower in lonley fear-
    you scream, they go harder when they hear.
    boil hot anger from inside your veins
    and let it all out with a cut or fifty more,
    stab the pain away with a knife-
    it still will do nothing to better your life.
    whipping the life from your broken body,
    emotionally draining your sorrowed mind,
    i can't be there to hold you, i don't know you-
    i reach out but nothing is there to console you.
    you think you're weak, they want it that way
    you vow to yourself you will make them pay.
    that day never comes they will never be found
    you hate them, they won, defeated on the ground.
    tears falling down your mangled face
    like spiderwebs glistening, vanishing now-
    you're not alone, why can't i do more?
    but nothing will ever heal your sore.

    Submitted on 2006-07-19 20:44:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Avalyne, I told you i would comment you. I really like this one... I think i know what it is about... it is beautiful writting though.. You have always been great at writting. Love yah,

    Sister Remedy
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
      Those last two lines at the bottom, are like the lines of my life...It may seem cliché' to say this, but it's like you summed up everyway I possibly feel with just two lines. It shocked me. They were elegant and so close to home for me that it was comically tragic in a good way. Great poem, you have a ton of talent, use it well!

    | Posted on 2006-07-19 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      ok im am completly in shock i love your work...its so damn awesome how u wrote this out the emotions i feel like fricken radiation off from you poems..........damn im so stalking you! your an amazing poet this poem kicks ass and i completly love what u have done with it.

    all the love

    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you for making this poem. It shows that you love me alot. Im not afraid anymore...... i love you
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by freakystyley | [ Reply to This ]
      You have a gift with expressing emotions that most of us are too afraid to let out. I agree the last to lines are very powerful, and they made me think a lot about my own life. I thank you for that. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Saimi Marie | [ Reply to This ]

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