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    dots Submission Name: FATdots
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    Author: 2xhatedxsoulx2
    ASL Info:    18/F/MN
    Elite Ratio:    1.24 - 44/34/24
    Words: 340
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 1142
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2091



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       OK i didn't write this..but i really really like it..It made me cry..hope you like it too..It's just like me intill it says"her dad saw on the floor like it was a bad dream"


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    Her voice was sweet, her eyes were kind
    She kept secrets and told no lies
    She had many friends that helped her out
    And she helped them up when they were down

    One day at school her friend called her fat
    She said it louder and everyone laughed
    Everyone turned on her and called her a dweeb
    "Please, I've had enough" she would beg and plead

    She ran home crying that very same day
    Then she ran to the bathroom and grabbed a blade
    She pressed it harshly against her wrist
    And blood rapidly poured down her skin

    The next Monday she came to school with scars
    The kids in class saw and went on being harsh
    They called her big, round, large, and wide
    She wanted to yell but she kept it all inside

    Soon she stopped eating, skipping every other meal
    Her parents never knew, she kept her lips sealed
    She became skinny, pale, bony, and thinner
    She threw up her breakfast, lunch, and sometimes dinner

    She looked around and everything became dark
    So she closed her eyes and fell apart

    She fainted that day but no one heard her scream
    Her dad saw her on the floor like it was a bad dream
    She was rushed to the hospital in an hour or so
    And her parents whispered and yelled "please don't go!"

    She just layed there on the hospital bed
    Cuts on her wrists and a messed up head
    Her parents by her side crying endlessly
    But she just looked upon them cluelessly

    She slit her wrists, she slit her neck
    She threw up her food every night before bed
    She took some drugs, "it was better than a knife"
    She wasted her money, her time, and her life

    Her voice once was sweet, her eyes once were kind
    Until a single word mutilated her mind
    Her friends hoped it wasn't something they said
    Cause a few days later, they found out she was dead




    Submitted on 2006-07-20 02:38:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is great...i know how she felt and how assy people can be....i am sorry for everyone that know how its like and hpe thaT HISTORY DOES NOT REPEAT!
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by bloodyalexander | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is like about me...up to the part..'she closed her eyes and fell apart' then its nothin like me after that
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by 2xhatedxsoulx2 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was really good, whoever wrote it. It would really open up people's eyes if they read this. I was picked on all the time in grade school. I was called fat but I never got that extreme. This is good work :) The most effective lines were:

    She fainted that day but no one heard her scream
    Her dad saw her on the floor like it was a bad dream
    She was rushed to the hospital in an hour or so
    And her parents whispered and yelled "please don't go!"


    This is some good work :)


    X- Atonement

    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]


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