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    dots Submission Name: half seen girldots
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    Author: 2xhatedxsoulx2
    ASL Info:    18/F/MN
    Elite Ratio:    1.24 - 44/34/24
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 751
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    Description:
       about my best friend..i was trying to write it as if i was her..I used stuff she has told me b4 in the lines


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    dotshalf seen girldots
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    He never seems to notice,
    He never seems to care,
    About the Half-Seen Girl,
    Or her un-denying stare.

    She wants him to see her,
    She wants him to understand,
    The pain she feels inside,
    The wanting of a helping hand.

    She wants him to hold her
    When she feels like crying.
    She wants him to love her
    And keep her from hiding.

    The touch of his hand,
    The warming of his heart.
    The glance of his face,
    The tears from her unbroken heart.

    She cries herself to sleep,
    Thinking she will never have him as a lover.
    This brings tears to her eyes.
    Maybe she should keep her face covered.

    She knows he'll never care,
    She knows he'll never accept her in his world.
    These are the thoughts,
    Of the Half-Seen Girl.




    Submitted on 2006-07-20 02:45:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is pretty good i liked it
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by gothfreak | [ Reply to This ]


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