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    dots Submission Name: you have no cluedots
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    Author: 2xhatedxsoulx2
    ASL Info:    18/F/MN
    Elite Ratio:    1.24 - 44/34/24
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
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    You saw me smile, nothing but a lie...
    You saw me laugh, when I really wanted to cry...
    You fought to save me, but it was all in vain...
    Now that you see the real me, nothing will be the same...
    You're nothing but a memory now, only visions in my mind...
    You're too far to save me, and I'm too lost to find...
    But still you never gave up on me, you still had hope...
    But why? Why did you try, when everyone else had left me to die?
    You scare me sometines, by the way you care about me
    Sometimes I hide from you, sometimes I flee...
    I just want to get away, from my family, my home, even you...
    You think you know me... you have no clue...





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      i really like this, a lot. i know how you feel, when sometimes you just want to get away from it all. even the people who seem to actually care. excellent rhyme scheme. emotions are a powerful tool, and you handled them perfectly. ^_^ keep writing.

    - Michi
    | Posted on 2007-01-20 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem.. i like it alot and i tend to feel that exact way alot.. and idky but i know exactly how u feel. how everyone thinks they no you but really they dont they only see you as a way they want to not really the real you... keep it up!

    <33 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it, very emotional and powerful great write
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Alexandra | [ Reply to This ]


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