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Author: Amberger
ASL Info:    13/f/earth
Elite Ratio:    1.9 - 49 /85 /24
Words: 47
Class/Type: Story /Serious
Total Views: 1121
Average Vote:    5.0000
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when i was
about 4
my brother
was 2
and he grabbed
a knife out of
the sink
and i tried to
make it so
he didnt cut
himself but instead
i pulled the
knife the wrong
way and
almost cut
his thumb off

Submitted on 2006-07-20 11:01:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  huh thats crazy then he would of been thunbless ha ha joke but good write, ty
| Posted on 2006-12-25 00:00:00 | by ty | [ Reply to This ]
  i reali like dis one!! :)
| Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by lil_shell | [ Reply to This ]
  Allright, the 1st time I read this I was like: weird. Then I read it overand realized that it was beautiful in it's own way. Its unique and must be one of a kind. Well thought of. Looking forward to read some more of your work.
| Posted on 2006-09-13 00:00:00 | by riki_nl | [ Reply to This ]
  From everything of yours that I have read so far, I found this one the best.

[W]hen [I] was [four and my brother was two,]
he grabbed a knife out of the sink.
[For his safety, I attempted
To pull it from his hand,
doing in the wrong way]
and almost cut[ting] his little thumb off

Above, I have a few suggestions which I think may improve this slighly. Though the best suggestion I could give you would be to let your mind roam free and write whatever you have in your head. Do not limit yourself. Express yourself better, and use a different format for such stories.

Sometimes, older people think that they are more careful than younger people but it often plays in the opposite direction. I am glad you took on such a topic.

It is a good thing that his finger missed the knife. That would have been scary.

| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  neic yet strange. actually reminded me of something similar dat happened in my past but not at that young of an age but good job but i think you should make more expressions then just a statement but its good nice work
| Posted on 2006-08-30 00:00:00 | by bryan88 | [ Reply to This ]
  My first thought upon reading this: Wow. How random.

But I suppose that's a good thing in a sense. It make this unique.

For some reason it reminded me of when I was 5 and my little sister was 3, and she practically bit off her tongue. Slightly unrelated, but hey.
| Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by bad trip | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought that would be a horrifying experience. I'm glad that his finger didn't get cut off though. I think that maybe, as in Sadie, you should make it so that there are no spaces in between the lines. Other than that, good job adn i hope that you continue to write interesting poems. Oh, and one other thing, maybe instead of classifying it as a story, classify it as a poem. Other than that, good job..again.
| Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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