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Dedicated: 4 the one i'm "in love"

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 90
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Dedicated: 4 the one i'm "in love"

Dear you,

I love you more
than i value my life
yet i seem 2 be wrong
more than i'm right

i don't wanna be in love
the way i'm in love with you
because we are the way we are
one of us will be untrue

but on the bright side
i want you to know
i'm ya down chick
just hope it shows

anyways baby
so you know it's true
i will always be
in love with you

Danni aka your wifey

Submitted on 2006-07-20 12:51:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Dear wify I think any expression of love is a good expression of love & I hope your other half gets to read this poem. Now if he is in any way untrue to you. Then your love is not blind, its just not clear. Good work.
The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  aww. how sweet.... i think you did really good on this poem.. but i also think it could use a little more construction... for instance... in the third line of the third stanza, "i'm ya down chick"... that line right there does not fit any where in this piece of work...!!! it totally sets everything off. other than that.. i think this was a wonderful poem. i think you did a great job... i liked how you wrote as a letter and all. well, keep up the good work.. hope to read some more of your poetry...

- Cowboy
| Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by psycotic cowboy | [ Reply to This ]

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