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    dots Submission Name: Dedicated: 4 the one i'm "in love"dots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 682
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsDedicated: 4 the one i'm "in love"dots
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    Dear you,

    I love you more
    than i value my life
    yet i seem 2 be wrong
    more than i'm right

    i don't wanna be in love
    the way i'm in love with you
    because we are the way we are
    one of us will be untrue

    but on the bright side
    i want you to know
    i'm ya down chick
    just hope it shows

    anyways baby
    so you know it's true
    i will always be
    in love with you

    love,
    Danni aka your wifey




    Submitted on 2006-07-20 12:51:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dear wify I think any expression of love is a good expression of love & I hope your other half gets to read this poem. Now if he is in any way untrue to you. Then your love is not blind, its just not clear. Good work.
    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. how sweet.... i think you did really good on this poem.. but i also think it could use a little more construction... for instance... in the third line of the third stanza, "i'm ya down chick"... that line right there does not fit any where in this piece of work...!!! it totally sets everything off. other than that.. i think this was a wonderful poem. i think you did a great job... i liked how you wrote as a letter and all. well, keep up the good work.. hope to read some more of your poetry...

    - Cowboy
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by psycotic cowboy | [ Reply to This ]


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