hey mike....! i love this poem. you have the most creative, genius mind that i've ever had the honor of seeing tiny speckles of! i just love the constant opposites throughout this poem.
to tremble upon......but no longer feel weak! and although there is no physical opposite between the two: living stable......in a fairy tale! the stolen heart that's now ripping the other's apart to depend on a dependent letting your guard down and sharing everything inside....
i truly enjoyed this. the opposition felt like a constant tug, pull, torment almost. you geniusly put your emotion not only in your words but in the style of your words, so that we might hurt too. poets like you are "so rare, so hard to find"! ;)
unattainable are the lips I seek to tremble upon mine
to let down your guard and share everything you have inside
Such beautiful and delicate discriptions. Who wrote this for you lol
To feel no longer weak but stable in the fairly tale in your mind. I like how you use fairy tale to describe this unattainable relationship you long for. Like it's such a dream its almost unreal to you. Yet real enough for you to discribe in such detail: lips trembling, hearts ripping...(serioiusly, who wrote this for you!!)
Just kidding. You just keep getting better and better at this.
Submission Name: medium rare
