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    dots Submission Name: As Longdots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 375



    Description:
       to make it simple... a relationship gone wrong from lies and believing them all....


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    dotsAs Longdots
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    After so many lies,
    you'd think I'd say good bye.
    yet im still here somehow
    asking for you right now
    you should be telling me you'd like to be forgiven
    even though i was liven
    with every lie, mistaken kiss, and touch
    but im not asking for much
    i'll forget it all,
    as long as your with me....




    Submitted on 2006-07-20 20:08:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a great poem that alot of people could relate to the sentamental touch helps the reader feel like he can feel what you are going through. The only part that I didn't understand was the part when it says " even though I was liven" However besides that it was a good poem.

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    JAmes

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    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to this poem. This is very well written.
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah this alright...that sintamental...kind of mind state...I write [censored] like that alot..
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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