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    dots Submission Name: Sins of the Souldots
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    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       When I first applied for college, an aunt told me that I didn't have what it took to make it in school and should therefore keep all of my options open. She happened to be the first person I called when I was accepted early and on scholarship.


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    dotsSins of the Souldots
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    Hush, silence...don't speak of them.
    They are just dreams,
    Nothing of consequence.
    Dreams won't take you anywhere.
    They just hold you back,
    Pulling you down.
    What's the use?
    You'll never reach those heights,
    Don't you know?
    Dreams...they're just the sins of your soul.
    Forbidden, shunned, locked away.
    Ignore them, forget them...
    They won't take you far.
    Not from here.
    Haven't you learned yet?
    Dreams just hold you back.
    make you reach too far.
    You'll never acheive those goals
    Leave them behind, turn away...
    Don't chase those fantasies.
    That's all they are...
    Dont you know?
    Dreams...they're just sins of our souls.




    Submitted on 2004-05-17 11:18:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love this thing. I love comparing something so pure and innocent as a dream to a sin. Sins are relative--what is bad? Hehe. I love this.
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by Seiraryu | [ Reply to This ]


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