I belong where, in the skies of my thoughts;
in the sea of what's good or of evil descent?
The soft tender touch of the breath of my skin,
is ever so gentle upon your whisper's outlying armor
...everything is wonderful...
| What you have is really good but to me it just begs for more. You start out with that huge question and then, it seems to me, fail to fully explore it. You've obviously decided to go with the good here, so let us see the complete picture. |
|| Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ] || This did make sense to me. This is just beautiful. It kinda makes me think of how teh world is today; how it's filled with good and evil and how people on the outside may be like "amor" but on the inside they are soft and gentle. beatiful poem. |
|| Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ] || Alright, since, as you very clearly said, the content may not make sense to anyone but yourself, I'll just say I thought it was beautiful. I really liked the piece, it's word choice, and construction. I'm fond of things that don't specific structure, and I'm a minimalist as well, so, yeah, I enjoyed this. The second stanza is quite interesting, kind of switching it up there. Anyway, yeah, good stuff. This comment is so helpful... sorry lol|
|| Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by IamYourTragedy | [ Reply to This ] |