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    dots Submission Name: Momentsdots
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    Author: Adaria
    ASL Info:    20/F/AR
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 39/38/14
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsMomentsdots
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    Oh, my beautiful butterfly
    To merely gaze at you holds no fulfillment
    I'd much rather ride you through the night
    Pink wings beating through black air
    Stirring the thick sky
    And causing each blade of grass to stand at its peak
    I'll glide on your back
    Topping every mountain exalting love
    And bowing in the valleys where lust lurks in tree limbs
    I will follow you into those dark corners
    Where there is no room for modesty
    Until the sun peaks over the East
    I will live between your wings




    Submitted on 2006-07-21 08:18:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      0k, im sorry but im going to be completely baised!!! my alais is butterfly wings!!love from start to finish, by images and the romance, it was perfect! you could/should, if you had the time, read my poem " butterfly wings". ;)
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by butterfly wings | [ Reply to This ]
      hey there
    this is really interesting ... its something different, and the metaphor of the butterfly symbolizing the certain loved one is original ... i feel that if u extend this, make it a little longer, it could be the lyrics to a beautiful song ...
    i really loved this write .. the imagery, the use of words, the flow, it just all pieces together to form something beautiful ...
    and the title, its the piece of the puzzle that doesnt seem like it belongs when alone, but when placed with the whole thing, it brings the puzzle to life ...
    ok yea .. i dunno if ur understanding what im saying here, hehe, sorry im having a hard time trying to put my scrambled thoughts into a proper sentence ...
    anyways the point being, very well written and i loved the idea ...
    congrats :)
    cheers
    DeepsLighter
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by DeepsLighter | [ Reply to This ]


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