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    dots Submission Name: The Primordial Directivedots

    Author: SHRINKSDR
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 476/375/39
    Words: 304
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Inspired by recent events in Iraq and the Mideast.
    From primitive times to the crusades and present!

    The Same as it ever was, same as it ever was!!!

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    dots The Primordial Directivedots

    The Primordial Directive

    Buried in us dark and deep.
    Untouchable, unknowable never asleep.
    Instincts meant for our survival
    Now threaten the race and make us rivals.

    These genes that have been passed on
    We do not think, but act with brawn
    Preserve thyself, and thy pool of genes
    At all costs, and by any means.

    No mixing, pollution or any dilution
    Of the pools purity and constant profusion.
    The group, the clan, or the tribe,
    Must insure, they will survive.

    Different color, hue or nation,
    Must destroy this abomination!
    Kill them with, club and Stone,
    Rip with nails, teeth, fists, and bone.

    They don’t believe in the God we do.
    We are the righteous, moral and true,
    We must conquer, with sword and lance
    Slash and gash in this bloody dance

    They have everything that we lack,
    Infidels! It’s ours we will take it back!
    Suicide bombers – kill and maim
    Women and children - it’s all the same!

    They want to destroy us and take our land.
    But retaliation is at hand!
    Crazy, evil – we are not safe!
    Strike back with planes that bomb and strafe.

    They have oil we dearly need
    Weapons of mass destruction! Heed!
    Rockets and missiles we fire at will
    In the name of freedom blood we spill

    And so it goes from times primeval,
    The fear and hate that is so evil.
    This need to fight and kill all others,
    Leaves so many crying mothers.

    Difference need not be so feared,
    When children with love and respect are reared.
    When rainbow’s colors all hearts fill.
    Then peace on earth and to all good will.

    Submitted on 2006-07-21 16:20:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi there and a Happy new year to you also.

    Subject matter aside this reads really well, it thunders along at a good old speed and keeps you hooked all the way through, which is not so easy in a longer poem I think.
    Subject matter in hand, it's been said. It's a tumultuous world that we live in and we can only hope that it comes to an end before we realise we can never come back from it.

    enjoyed the read, nicely done
    | Posted on 2007-01-04 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      I would just like to say that I very much liked this poem. It's so sad. Thank you for writing about a subject many are afraid to venture to.
    | Posted on 2006-10-11 00:00:00 | by fabulousAMY | [ Reply to This ]
      amen is right.. this is a sentiment that anyone on either side can share., we have evolved andgrown and still we haven't changed!! SAD. I wonder when things will be diffrent.
    | Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      Amen, brother, amen

    be happy

    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Another powerful poem by you. I must admit, the picture you have provided here just makes my heart ache. So tragic and sad. War is senseless and so many innocent people suffer and die and lose their loved ones and for what? I dont understand why we all cant just accept each other for who we are and allow everyone to have their own beliefs. War never solves anything, it is more of a battle for control and power, and seems to be a constant in our world. Your words are well written and expressed and you worked the rhyme in here quite nicely I must say. A world of peace would be wonderful but I hesitate to think we will ever see it. Great job with this one!

    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think in the next couple of millennia (assuming we don’t kill ourselves in the meantime, of course) there will be a mixing of races to the point we’ll almost be one race. Nice effort here. One wonders when the Israelis and Palestinians will have a bellyful of the killing and stop.

    Peace (one day maybe),

    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Great piece, I am moved deeply by its images.

    The flow is easy to follow and smooth with the rhyne pattern.

    Deeply felt...

    Nice job!

    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]

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