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    dots Submission Name: Feelings; Falling Around Me.dots
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    Author: Qutedia7
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 54/70/31
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 129
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 784



    Description:
       This is a poem to describe the characteristics of me and my ex. I tried to use as little words as possible. The poem jumps around. Only people who have gone through bad relationships would understand.

    Comments.
    Thoughts.

    Yes. That would be nice.

    xx--- Diamond.


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    dotsFeelings; Falling Around Me.dots
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    U
    Me
    Different worlds
    Still friends
    Maybe not
    Glowing smiles
    Cold words
    Stupid lies
    No truth
    Why
    Why not
    Love
    Hate
    Tempers
    Misunderstanings
    Bad feelings
    Good feelings
    Lost and found
    Then back again
    Confusing
    Complicated
    Friends now?
    Maybe, maybe not
    Quiet
    Loud
    Fake
    Real
    How is it supposed to be?
    Tell me
    No?
    Why?
    Disrespect
    Respect
    Home-training
    U.. barely
    Funny
    Both
    Laidback
    Chill
    Careful
    Daredevil
    Sometimes
    Maybe
    Never

    -Never Say Never-




    Submitted on 2006-07-21 19:08:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is an okay piece. I mean all it really is, is words and feelings thrown together to try to make this. I know the feelings but you could have done a little more with it. Maybe make a few lines longer, or add a few lines to help describe other things here and there. But over all its a good piece that just needs a little work. So keep writing.

    Kitty
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by Crescent | [ Reply to This ]
      So true! I can relate to this. Bad relationships give you awkwards feelings, often. Usually the opposites, even at the same time. Love is complicated! It's two humans who are trying to give themselves up for each other, so it's hard! Though I think that when you love someone - everything's possible. Sometimes these feelings are necessary to keep the love alive...I think. Because things cannot be perfect, and if they are, there's something wrong, besides, that would be boring. I like the parts about friends: "Still friends
    Maybe not", "Friends now?
    Maybe, maybe not". It's so hard for people who have had a relationship to become friends. Only some people can do that. And, that comes to your mind a lot of times when your relationship is going up and down and you see that a breakup might be near. Good poem - it's true, only people who have had a bad relationship will understand.
    | Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by April0414 | [ Reply to This ]



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