Ryder Of The Diaper Set

Author: junemarie ASL Info:    62,F, Port Richey, Fl. Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 66 /70 /27 Words: 113

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Ryder Of The Diaper Set

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Photo-----My grandson Brody The little guy around our house Is cool beyond compare As we put on his jacket and wooly cap To get out for a breath of air. Then no sooner we're out and driving In our oh so conservative car He sits in his Sleepy Ryder seat And makes like a movie star. Our Volvo soon becomes a bike Which gobbles up the highway While sun and wind whip through his hair? He roars down every byway. And he would race the wind forever If his diaper weren't wet Oh woe to the image you beget... You Ryder of the diaper set!

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Aw, what a cutie! I love babies, and he is just adorable. I think the rhyme works well with the light theme. Our Volvo soon becomes a bike Which gobbles up the highway While sun and wind whip through his hair? I don't think you need the question mark. Oh woe to the image you beget... You Ryder of the diaper set! I also don't think you need the ellipsis, but I admit that they're so overused that I sometimes react negatively even when they are appropriate. I suppose it's because I actually read more poems with them than without them on this site. Nicely done, Amy

| Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]

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