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Dry Away the Tears


Author: MidnightMelody
ASL Info:    18/f/US
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 44 /52 /55
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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yeah its pretty short a wrote it a year or two ago when i was being lazy and well just basking in the sun.


Dry Away the Tears



Sun, dry away the tears
of the one that tries to fight
all his fears.

Come to a chosen land for all
fighting as they fall
broken together as they lay
beneath it all

Sun, you can be so warm
I love to bask in your presence
please tell me more
of stories of forlorn.

Dry away the tears
of he who can fight no more.




Submitted on 2006-07-21 21:09:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  OHHH….If only the sun could dry all the tears. I thought this poem had a good meaning to it. It read as if it came from a heart of a caring person. Although I feel like it was missing something, I dunno, that’s just me. It was a good write nevertheless, one which I enjoyed. Thanks for sharing it.
| Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by gigglebox24 | [ Reply to This ]
  OOooo I wish it was sunny out side now :(
Good poem I like it its short and I could image myself bathing in the sun as I read it. Good job

-darkeveris
| Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by darkeveris | [ Reply to This ]


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