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Doughnut Eaters


Author: MidnightMelody
ASL Info:    18/f/US
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 44 /52 /55
Words: 106
Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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i wrote this... was it last year? i was trying to cheer up a friend as she got dumped.. though to all the guys that might read this.. i know you're not all jerks! :D


Doughnut Eaters



It's not fair to know
things don't always go as we hope.

It's not fair to see
him hurting you beside
the face he cared for you.

If only this world
was full of peace and love
instead of hope and despair...

Guys are like doughnuts
they're sweet only
for a lil' while then
they turn stale and soggy...

Don't be the doughtnut eater...
even though they're delicious.

Fight the despair
Hang out with me
We'll fight it together
and I'll make you forget
that truly we don't
want to be doughnut eaters.

We ARE the health freaks!




Submitted on 2006-07-21 23:00:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the compairson of guys to doughnuts. and I really like the ending of this pome but.....oh wait right there was no but :P

-darkeveris (not good at critique-ing what I like)
| Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by darkeveris | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha I love that. It's so true.
I don't know if it was supposed to be funny, but it made me laugh.

"Guys are like doughnuts
they're sweet only
for a lil' while then
they turn stale and soggy..."

lol That's awesome.
Next time I talk to my boyfriend, I'm calling him a doughnut. (He's in prison, so who knows when that'll be.) He fits the description perfectly.

But anyway, the end is great too.

"If only this world
was full of peace and love
instead of hope and despair..."

Yeah, if only. But why would anyone want that?? *sarcasm*
There's no scar to show for kindness. We learn so little from peace.
(I think I read that somewhere before.)

Anyway, I really enjoyed this.

Very nicely done
-nikkki
| Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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