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Come To Me


Author: MidnightMelody
ASL Info:    18/f/US
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 44 /52 /55
Words: 59
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
Total Views: 960
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Description:




Come To Me



Listen to the incoming call
of tideal waves crashing loud and tall

Broken hearts of despair and pain
shape our mind everyday

Sincerity is like a bird
it flies around but is barely heard

Come, I say, come to me
do not delay

I share your pain
I know your heart
I will forever stay




Submitted on 2006-07-21 23:24:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well-written. It seems like the words are coming from someone's best friend. Towards the end of that poem I see, words of encouragement; great inspiration.
| Posted on 2006-07-28 00:00:00 | by Full Truth | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this one. It looked so simplistic at first but as I began to read it, I got absorbed into the poem. You used great descriptions and I liked the different things you used...like tidal waves and that. In my mind, it could just be my mind, but I do not connect the title to the poem in a great deal. I think that the first three stanzas are excellent, but then after that it kind of fell apart a bit. Good attempt though. Keep Writing.
~Caotic~
| Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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