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The Rose

Author: MidnightMelody
ASL Info:    18/f/US
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Words: 168
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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This is my first poem...

The Rose

A rose's petals represent beauty;
You may be the prettiest woman on
Earth but only the insides count;
If you are not beautiful on the
Inside as you are out; then you
Are not beautiful at all.

A rose's stem represents strength;
You may be a champion at the
World's strongest man competition;
But you are only as strong as
You are when trouble comes.

A rose's leaves represent a lending hand;
You may sell all yo have to charity;
But truly when you gave, was it out of
Your heart? And ask yourself this question:
If I was in need would they truly want
To help me?

Now, you may think that is all a rose
has, but yet you are missing an important
part ~the thorns.

A rose's thorns represent wisdom.
If you grab a rose harshly you
will bleed profusely;
Just as you gain wisdom,
use it carefully;
Otherwise your heart will bleed profusely.

Submitted on 2006-07-21 23:29:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Very nice free-style/prose. Especially the thorns part of it, the throns are one of my favorite parts of a rose, they are the weapons that guard its beauty. I thought this was very unique in its own little way. I'm looking forward to more from you.

| Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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