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    dots Submission Name: Never Forgotten Pastdots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsNever Forgotten Pastdots
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    Good bye to my past
    Good bye to my anguish
    I shall throw you aside
    And leave you behind
    Move on
    Move on
    Nothing well last
    Always continuing
    This cycle of past
    Again
    Again
    I will throw you away
    Contuning to live
    My life away
    At last
    At last
    Gone you will be
    In the end my life
    Waisted and free
    At death
    At death
    Laying in my coffin
    When the worms and bugs
    Crawl through and devour me




    Submitted on 2006-07-21 23:41:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really good poem. I like the truth behind it. One thing I could suggest in the lines "Nothing well last Always continuing This cycle of past".. "well" should be "will". But I enjoyed the read, just always remember your past will always be apart of you, you can try to forget it and put it all behind but it'll still be there. It's what makes you "you" today :).

    ~Cris
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a pretty cool poem , I like the whole message of the poem every time someone comes to me with a problem I always tell them that even what they are going to will one day pass. I like the way you let the same line repeat after every fourth line, good stuff.

    much LOVE
    James

    P.S. Thanx for commenting on "Don't you remember Im glad you like it and hope you check out more of my stuff soon.
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]


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