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It Really Doesn't Matter

Author: MidnightMelody
ASL Info:    18/f/US
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 44 /52 /55
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Society
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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It Really Doesn't Matter

Upon your broken heart
lies a cruel and thoughtless world
You've taken so many chances
to be a new girl

You've done so many things
that you've known you shouldn't do
but you did them anyway
just to be "COOL"

You've got nothing left now
you've screwed up big
not even your purity
forget the dang jigs!

Now you've got a kid
to fill your days and hours
bored out of our wits
you plan schemes to blow them
into freaking bits

but listen to me!
listen to me, My Child
forget the planning, the schemes
you're being too wild!!!

Stop this foolish nonsense!
you're not thinking!
I've been here all along
but you had this idea of forsaking!

I'll talk you back
no matter what you've done
just ask me back into your life
and we've won

Submitted on 2006-07-21 23:49:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I only saw 1 tiny typo, "I'll [talk] you back", but I believe you meant, "I'll take you back". Besides that, I enjoyed reading this poem. It seems like it might've been passionately written.

To understand this poem: One must know how it is to lose a loved-one and hope for "their return".
| Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by Full Truth | [ Reply to This ]

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