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    dots Submission Name: Timedots
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    Author: Poeticprincess
    ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333/325/104
    Words: 331
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 642
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1999



    Description:
       alright i wrote this about two minutes ago and i'm happy so far with it. I used the hook and the bridge from neyo's song time but anyways tell me what you think. btw i'm rapping in this one.


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    (verse 1)
    i used to sit a home and wonder
    why you don't make time for me
    it's funny i gave everything up for you
    stop talking to my friends and my family
    but now i realize i ain't shit to you
    so i'm leaving this message on you answering machine
    i wonder how long it will take for you to know
    or maybe when my words will get through
    but...

    (chours)
    In the time it would take you to learn from your mistakes
    In the time it would take to dial the phone
    In the time it will take you to realize her greatness, she'll be gone, she's moved on
    To someone who takes the time

    (verse 2)
    now all you gotta do is look back
    and i'll tell you how long it took to make this track
    in the begining you had all the time in the world
    now you only got time for ya other gurls
    i wasn't a priority to you
    you had other things on ya mind
    but i guess you'll have to see it's too late
    and all i'm leaving is this song behind
    to tell you..

    (chours)
    In the time it would take you to learn from your mistakes
    In the time it would take to dial the phone
    In the time it will take you to realize her greatness, she'll be gone, she's moved on
    To someone who takes the time

    (bridge)
    Hey, no one knows what they have until they don't
    And by then it doesn't matter anymore
    You're all alone

    (chours)
    In the time it would take you to learn from your mistakes
    In the time it would take to dial the phone
    And the time it would take you to realize her greatness, she'll be gone (she'll be gone)
    In the time it will take you to realize her greatness, she'll be gone, she's moved on
    Hang up the phone...






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      yo this was good. it's messed up how some guys mess over girls like that. then they wanna beg u to come back when ur gone. they don't know what they got till it's gone
    | Posted on 2006-08-15 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      u and justin are gonna battle? ha. ur both worthless. lol. this one is good. i've remade so many love songs it's not even funny so this kinda reminded me of one of my writes but our styles are totally different. i like the way ur verses kinda faded out at the end. pretty original
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      yo, this got a nice message to it..its pretty good...the time is comin real real soon that I'ma get at you, and you gotta get back at me..you know what I'm sayin...that battle I was talkin bout, its comin...:)

    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]


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