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    dots Submission Name: Blossoming Backwardsdots
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    Author: vampirefreak69
    Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 30/103/87
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    Pink cherry blossoms:
    The soothing idea of tranquility,
    The offering of innocence.
    A gentle breeze caresses their petals
    And they flutter to the ground in their glory.
    A rainfall of pink,
    A curtain of flowers.
    Each one completely identical to the rest.

    Same.
    All the same.

    This is what has been hammered into our heads.
    Peer pressure, the assimilation, the lust for beauty:
    This is what we have become.
    The beautiful and white porcelain face.
    The bland, unemotional, shallow face.
    Lost is the individualized beauty.

    You slather your face with chemicals
    And lace your body into restraints
    All to fit that perfect form, that ideal picture.
    Itís everything you can do to look better than everyone else out there.
    Yet now, instead of standing out from the crowd
    Everyone looks exactly alike.

    Same.
    All the same.

    The shower of petals continues to fall,
    Blossom after blossom,
    Until it seems like a huge mass of crimson
    Instead of each characterized and special face.
    They all follow the same path,
    And they continue to fall,
    Dropping to the ground
    Before meeting their death on the cruel pavement.

    But one, one blossom rises up with the gentle caress of the wind.
    Up into the sky again, into the embrace of the sun
    Soaring to meet other different opportunities,
    Refusing to die just like all the rest.





    Submitted on 2006-07-22 14:10:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...

    The concept of the cherry blossom symbolizing the way society wants us to be, how we should define ourselves if we want to go anywhere. You've captured the emotion and meaning behind this piece excellently. Your imagery is amazing. Wonderful write...

    **faves addition**

    Cheers <3
    megan
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by disturbed420 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! AMAZING! AWESOME! I loved this poem. It was interesting, original, it was superb. And all the things you said in your poem were true. I liked how you started with refering to the pink cherry blossoms, and then that morphed into how society is making evryone look , act, everything the same. Then you referred back to the pink cherry blossoms and then your closing, which was awesome. Again, I loved this, and I, wow, awesome. I hope that you continue to write great art like this. :)
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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