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    dots Submission Name: To the Deathdots
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    Author: Mr. Creep
    ASL Info:    16. Female. Here
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 96/177/112
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 966
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsTo the Deathdots
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    I took his hand,
    he took my heart,
    and forever till end,
    nothing would tear us apart.
    But it all went downhill,
    on a road to misery.
    All empty and alone,
    I watched them invisibly.
    I witnessed a fake love,
    took a role in a life like play.
    I thought love was real,
    untill he went away.
    He still has my heart,
    keeps it in his mind with a few others.
    In my brain that he slows,
    on her lips that he smuthers.
    He's still killing my soul
    but I hope his life is perfect.
    and now opon my broken self,
    his lies have no affect.




    Submitted on 2006-07-22 18:46:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i really like this poem, i can almost relate to this, cept my heart want broken this time.... i refused to even let him leave a scratch.
    i am gonna add this to my favs
    its a really good piece

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-08-07 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i really liked this maybe because i can realate to it. tht and you wrote it really well. i could get the feeling off it really well. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by gothfreak | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting because it relates to alot of people who have had their hearts broken.
    Keep it up and you'll prolly be world famous someday.
    Signed,
    The Angel Of Hell
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by BloodtornAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this and i can relate to it alot...

    <3 Brittaney-Mae
    | Posted on 2006-07-22 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]


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