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Author: giver_of_death
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Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Meh..Wrote this because I felt all a stupid guy..who liked me and who I liked..then I guess I was taking to lnog to ask him he was all like I spazzed and he got offline and I wrote this....edit it if you want..doesn't really matter.


You aren’t who I thought you were
Everything behind us is a blur
I thought you were the one
But our bonds have come undone
It seems its easy for you to push me away
For it was me, you did betray
All your words and icons were fake
Liking you was just a big mistake
But from mistakes we all learn
We may not get our feelings back in return
Know what bitch? I’m better then that
You’re not the only one online to chat
Maybe in a while you’ll think things through
You’re apologies then will be overdue
For I fell for you once, and never again
Your just a fucking bastard, amen.

Submitted on 2006-07-23 02:11:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Ooo Haha I love that. So angry.
I think it's awesome when people throw some bad words into their poetry. It helps express how pissed off they really are.
That guy sounds like an [censored]. You can do better. (lol I hate when people say that. Then you think, "yeah, but I dont want better, I want him, damnit" ...but it's true.)

"I thought you were the one
But our bonds have come undone"

Doesn't that always happen? See? This is why I say that love is death. (Sorry I'm so negative. lol I'm just bitter.)
Anyway, I think that might be my favorite part.

"All your words and icons were fake"

I love that line too. It's original.

Anywho, deary, I like this a lot.

As always
Wonderfully done
| Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  I feel exactly the same way right now. One of my friends has a crush or had a crush on me and I liked him too, but neither one of us has/had the courage to ask each other out. Its been almost a month and I'm starting to kind of like another guy now. So ya, I know how you feel .If only guys just asked us out and dint wait for us to ask them. Very, really good. Keep writing.
| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

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