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    dots Submission Name: smiledots
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    Author: secret kisses
    ASL Info:    22/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.81 - 558/438/138
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 806
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1175



    Description:
       corny i know, but this is my first pop lyrics, my other stuff is hip hop n' RnB,
    enjoy!


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    dotssmiledots
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    used to live my life on the low/
    didnt know which way to turn or where to go/
    but something changed the day i met you/
    my life was to be new/
    before you there was just me/
    i knew it was just half of who i could be/

    you lifted me up when i was down/
    you added a melody to this sound/
    filled me up when i was running dry/
    i can see all the love thats in your eyes/
    you took me out of the the unknown/
    and turned this house into a home/
    just stay with me for a while/
    you always now how to make me smile/


    tripping over gods plans/
    i was just running around in his hands/
    playing the game of life/
    taking each day in my stride/
    but now i know/
    just who to follow/

    you lifted me up when i was down/
    you added a melody to this sound/
    filled me up when i was running dry/
    i can see all the love thats in your eyes/
    you took me out of the the unknown/
    and turned this house into a home/
    just stay with me for a while/
    you always now how to make me smile/




    Submitted on 2006-07-23 04:56:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      what a softie. who am i to talk? i'm just glad u found love babe. sinceer's right for once. the verse u repeated is the best part
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      the lyrics were good.
    the verse that you repeated was the best part.
    But yes very corny.
    Nothin wrong wit that
    cuz at least you acknowledged that, ha

    keep it up
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Kyrenia, this is very good. The form and the repitition is just right. Good luck on your venture into the world pf pop !

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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