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    dots Submission Name: I need youdots

    Author: gigglygirl
    ASL Info:    19/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 369/191/37
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 2068
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       this is another poem for my project the last one imma post since its due on wednesday i've got to type up the rest of my poems so yeah please comment, oh the poem is an obsession one, so please comment!

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    dotsI need youdots

    I cant stop thinking of you
    may i see you
    the real you.
    you are my life
    i cannot live with out you
    the air i breathe, i breathe it for you
    without you i am nothing
    you are the reason why iwake up every morning
    hoping, wishing just to hear your voice
    just for a second
    when i am with you
    nothing can harm me
    you are my shield,
    from everything
    the good and the bad
    i cannot live with out you
    i need you.

    Submitted on 2004-05-17 15:29:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      deep feeling, shallow writng. wrap your feelings up in a symbol, situation.use some literary devices to provide interest. not bad but lacking.
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by ariadne | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.. just.. wow. I kno this feeling. This piece may only be for a project, but it's good. I like the fact that it doesn't have to rhyme, but it's short, simple, and to the point.
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by Dark Angel | [ Reply to This ]

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