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    dots Submission Name: The Dead of Her Followersdots
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    Author: Crestfallenman
    ASL Info:    24/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 622/961/454
    Words: 395
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsThe Dead of Her Followersdots
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    Rising from the blood,
    That flood the seas,
    Through faint love,
    And the hundred tragidies...

    A spirit lurks,
    With her decendants,
    To the world that relentlessly hurts,
    Inside the society that her heart was bent...

    Inside the burning shadows,
    The spirits worship her pain and her fame,
    And hold her like a demon that broke heavens window,
    That was filled with the worlds lust, and her fosaken shame...

    Swiming inside of her veins that are filled with tasteless blood,
    Inside the stream that would bring them to her burning heart,
    Her spirit is too trapped with darkness from her pain struck love,
    Doth she and her followers fell into tears, as there life fell apart...

    So trapped inside darkness, so pilled by her despair,
    They rot from their bleeding dreams,
    And tangle inside of her long silky black hair,
    To only walk along the earth that the twisted sun gleams...

    Seance to seance has turned a follower into blood,
    To only leave less of the final purgatories seconds behind,
    Lost in the venhemence of this destructive love,
    That would soon lace her followers and bring lustful time...

    Alone in the creations of the deep dark past,
    The knight of the light side walks with a bounty on her head,
    Leaving this world, she found no love, and left alone at last,
    To the followers of her, they were to burn, but breeded dead...

    And brought the eteranal dark rivers that would flood this place,
    To bring the malicious bloodshed to the virgins galore,
    And shed her vengence to all, with her lost fate and disgrace,
    And bring every the whole world in this deep dark horror...

    The grounds split into craters, and she came out naked,
    And brought misery to all the generations that left her,
    The world that was fled rancid,
    There would be no escape from the the violence that would stir...

    Screaming inside of the lustful blood,
    Laying down the devilish girl,
    She only wanted to die in the love,
    That was promised by God on this cursed dark world...

    But nothing happened, and the rope had fell,
    She came to bring her bloodspill to those who broke the promise,
    To the whole world, she'd start the damnation from hell,
    To the world that would bleed, and bleed for bliss...





    Submitted on 2004-05-17 15:35:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's dark, but it has depth. totally gross, which I LOVE. nice rhyming, not obvious t all. original
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by ariadne | [ Reply to This ]


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