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Saying Another Goodbye

Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 140
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
Total Views: 1089
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Saying Another Goodbye

goodbye tomorrow
for it will not come
my dreams full of sorrow
all coming undone
my wake is filled with sighs
my thoughts sinking in
these sad weeping and crying eyes
from provoking thots within
thousand poundings against my broken heart
who is there to love me
when can my life restart
I see no hope to build my dreams
Im tearing them down piece by piece
Ripping them at the seams
For who can I share with these
Share my hopes and laughs
Someone find me please
Give me what I lack
I wish i had one more moment
I wish i was whole again
I wish i could mend
the hole at the end
I know i can make it
i know i will survive
always shedding those sad tears
when saying another good bye

Submitted on 2006-07-23 11:37:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cheyanne, This is a beautiful poem. I can tell the amount of emotion you have put into this work... it's beautiful... Is this about your mom passing away? if so it is beautiful.. Love yah.

| Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by remedy bayden | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this!!! there a TON of emotion in this!! like u were pourin your soul into this!! it was great!! awesome job!
| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by secretmystery_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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