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Bringing Habits Back

Author: od9.1.04
ASL Info:    15/f/oh
Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19
Words: 153
Class/Type: Poetry /Death
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Bringing Habits Back

I read your note
And the words you had to say
All the hatred lines you wrote
Said you didn’t want to stay
Our love grew strong
Hearts turned to one
But now everything is wrong
Your presence with me is gone
My glass heart is shattered
My soul darkened and cold
My blank mind battered
The life we had you stole
Eyes searching for a solution
Need for my old habit pulses
It seems to be my only potion
He has made these causes
I covered the scars on skin
I’m rollin my sleaves now
Deeply the silver’s diggin
This started again, how?
My life is tearing up
With each cut I make
Sipped my last from the hope cup
Drinking my last mistake
Spine is shivering
Nerves are going numb
Knees no longer quivering
My final thot has come
Wat have you done to be..
Now that I am done?

Submitted on 2006-07-23 12:02:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hey cheyanne!

this is alex vollmer just to let ya kno...
this poem has a ton of pain in it that you can feel just radiating off the words! depressing and melancholy, but with real feeling behind it...great flow and unique rhyme too! going on the favorites!

| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]

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