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    dots Submission Name: Herdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I watch her
    She looks so innocent
    But alas, I know her truth
    No one will believe me
    For she is perfect

    To everyone her skin is flawless
    I see her scars
    I see her
    I know her

    Blonde, beautiful babyblue eyes
    I alone know where her diception lies
    Her smile is sickly
    To the world its so sweet

    She is so nice to everyone
    Everyone Except for me
    I know the way she treats me
    I know her words
    No one else does

    I see her putting her painted face on in the mirror
    I know she has no true beauty
    She is ugly inside
    I see it
    I hate her with all my might

    I hate you
    I hate you
    I hate you
    Stupid fake bitch





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      Hm. I like it. Mainly because not a lot of girls will admit hating another girl that much, and you ranted.

    Poetry ranting against one of those, beautiful, blondies. It made me feel sorry for you, for having to know her, and put up with her, when the rest of world won't.

    Scarlett



    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by ScarlettFever | [ Reply to This ]
      i guess. but usually when you hate someone it is cause you see some part of yourself in them you don't like. ofcourse there are people who are completely dispicable. so yeah . . . try to mix things up a bit. try to direct the readers thoughts in different directions and sorta take them on a journey and let them enjoy the scenery type thing and have their own story to tell from your poetry -- instead of trying to tell them what to feel. i guess . . . ya know? whatevers. thanks for your comment.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was good. I know exactly what that is like. In school, I see a lot of girls like that. I hate them all so much!
    Anyway, I like the rhyming, and I liked the end of the poem. I just love poems where feelings are expressed so clearly like that. I too write what I feel inside all the time.
    | Posted on 2006-07-23 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      i guess. but usually when you hate someone it is cause you see some part of yourself in them you don't like. ofcourse there are people who are completely dispicable. so yeah . . . try to mix things up a bit. try to direct the readers thoughts in different directions and sorta take them on a journey and let them enjoy the scenery type thing and have their own story to tell from your poetry -- instead of trying to tell them what to feel. i guess . . . ya know? whatevers. thanks for your comment.
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]


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