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Sunshine through sorrow

Author: LadyMerlina
ASL Info:    24/ F/ Montreal
Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 60 /93 /58
Words: 105
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Sunshine through sorrow

Quick, write it down.
Right quick.
Before you forget it.

It is at a lost for words
that I found a few.
A small prose
to remind me of you.

A silence in all
but in me,
a wordfall.
Stirring and deafening.
Your Thunder sounds tall.

Nothing but grey
and a rainbow
There was a wordflow.
Sunshine through sorrow.

It all flowed.
Through me
around me,
beneath me,
Over me.

The rapture took me captive.
Lost in a moment
I can never relive.
I wished you had been there.
And this is my evidence.

Submitted on 2006-07-23 19:18:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem started off and reminded me of what happens when I get an idea. I get ideas on street corners and on busses. I'm usually without any paper or pen. So I try to remember it and nine times out ten I forget the idea.

I also liked the second and third stanzas. They reminded me of bad times that I have had. The ending brought the poem to a good close.

| Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by usglen | [ Reply to This ]

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