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    dots Submission Name: The Modern Lady Libertydots
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    Author: jennah
    ASL Info:    19/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 101/73/22
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    Description:
       I just got back from a family vacation and one of the places we went was the Statue of Liberty. While I was there, I remembered this poem. I wrote it as an assignment for English a couple of years ago. It is a description of the modern American woman and is pretty self explanatory.


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    dotsThe Modern Lady Libertydots
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    You won't find her in a harbor,
    she's not watching from the sea.
    The modern Lady Liberty
    no statue would she be.
    Long hours spent at work,
    no time to rest her head,
    she freely gives all that she has
    just to get ahead.

    Ahead of competition,
    ahead of God above,
    she has no need for morals,
    no need for Christian love.
    These things might slow her down,
    they could jeopardize her pace.
    If she stops to help another,
    someone else could take her place.

    She stares into the mirror,
    despising what she sees.
    Nothing's ever good enough,
    just be all you can be.
    Try a little harder,
    take a little more.
    Instead of finding peace,
    she has bloodshed and war.

    In this land of freedom
    she is still a slave,
    a slave to modern culture,
    to the fortune that she craves.
    A slave to the timeclock,
    and to wealth indeed.
    All the time she fails to realize
    that God will set her free.




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      There are few good among the bad. Let colten spread his wings and fly into this world, and he shall see. I really liked the rhyme scheme, it seemed to come naturally for you. The theme I couldn't agree with more... well stated.
    | Posted on 2006-09-12 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting. You make today seem so...evil. I feel sorrow for this country yet not everything is so bad. I understand that you were trying to poetically show our stasis, but yo must remember that there are still good people living here.

    In honest reply, Colten
    | Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Colten | [ Reply to This ]


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