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    dots Submission Name: The Unfair Worlddots
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    Author: Stan-the-man-89
    ASL Info:    17 M Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/1/3
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Unfair Worlddots
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    Look at the world,
    Racism and discrimination,
    The world needs pacifism
    Ss needed in this internation,

    Why can't will be peaceful,
    Instead of inflicting harm,
    Do you want it to be peaceful,
    Start by being calm,

    Every Iraqi child walking free,
    can it indeed be a posibility,
    Without Bush the idiot we'd be happy,
    He'd then be in hell and God would be happy,

    The Anti-Christ has come in more people,
    one, two, three or even four people,
    The selfish Queen who relaxes on a hectare, And the homeless get a metre that ain't fare,




    Submitted on 2006-07-24 00:26:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is such a true poem. This is going around all of the world. . . . . . and some people are blind to it. They don't understand the truth. . . . . . .. . they just listen to whatever Bush freakin says. . . . . . because they are being stupid. Anyways. . . .. this poem is just so honest that you can't help but to like it. This was a very awesome write.


    ~ g fREAK ~



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