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Victim Of Love


Author: junemarie
ASL Info:    62,F, Port Richey, Fl.
Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 66 /70 /27
Words: 53
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
Total Views: 1083
Average Vote:    4.0000
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Victim Of Love



Victim of love
I see a broken heart
You've got your story to tell.

Victim of love
It's such an easy part
And you know how to play it so well.

I think you know what I mean
You're walking the wire
Of pain and desire
Looking for love in between.




Submitted on 2006-07-24 00:44:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was nice...it felt very...tragic...to me. As though love is only pain but the person still remains hopeful that one day they will find something different...
| Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
  short but sweet,this is a great poem and it says so much in just a few powerful words.very well written,its great that you can make it mean so much and say all that it says without going on and on about the same thin.striaght to the point,I love it.
Jamie x
| Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by korn9426 | [ Reply to This ]


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