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    dots Submission Name: Anger For Youdots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 1176
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    Description:
       Okay, this poem is sort of long. Wrote a couple months ago, I think I still need to revise it.


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    dotsAnger For Youdots
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    The anger I feel right now
    cannot be compared to anything else.
    My heart aches because of you.
    You don't even know it but it does.
    I tell myself that I should not cry,
    but it's very hard.
    What am I to do?
    Sday hi to you
    and pretend that nothing happened?
    I don't think so,
    you wounded me deep,
    your name engraved in my heart,
    must now be torn apart.

    You lead me on
    then you give an excuse.
    Nice one.
    I'll see to that
    when it's your heart being broken in two.

    Yet as I think about you,
    I can't help but feel
    anything but love!
    Why is it so?
    I don't want this feeling anymore,
    I need to get rid of this.

    Why is that love
    is the only feeling that hurts so much more?
    I need to know so I can
    numb it forever.
    The feeling of crying is so strong,
    it's unsettleling everything inside me.
    You don't even know.
    Do you?




    Submitted on 2006-07-24 02:17:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I've read a couple of your poems and they have lots of potential i can see the emotion and heart in them but i think you need to be more descriptive try to use different phrases and widen your vocabulary. This way things won't be so predictable. Your stuff is really good.
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by lah | [ Reply to This ]
      As you say, love can cause so much pain, heartbreak and misery. But it can also take us to places and give us feelings that we can only dream about. That is what makes it so special and hard to attain, as there is a fine line between love and happiness, and love and pain.

    Another good write from you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-10-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...i really like this one...i can relate to it...so good job!

    Brittany
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]


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