Lies
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Okay this is another long one, I'm afraid that's just how it came out. I'm not sure if it makes sense. I think I'll need to revise it.
Lies
I don't want to live a lie, but I've made my life with him now. I'm sorry for all the pain you feel at this moment. I promise you it will go away. You will form your life somewhere else away from me. All that was us will be a memory. I've told myself that it's not right, not to follow my heart but it's the better of the choices. I"ll tell you the truth, You have my heart at your command. There's just thing time cannot mend. I saw you the other day, it almost made me break down and cry. We have our seperate ways to go, it really might not be right but it's okay to be mad and hurt. Seeing each other would only break the fragile pieces we have put together. You would not want to see your place being filled by another. |
Submitted on 2006-07-24 02:27:15 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I can relate. But this poem found to be a tad confuzing. But you are an amazing poet, keep up the good work -Creep | Posted on 2006-07-30 00:00:00 | by Mr. Creep | [ Reply to This ] | So we pretty much live the same life. I dont know if I would've really been into this had I not been able to COMPLETELY relate. MY story: Rebound guy, fell into a deep like with me, and I couldnt do that. It wasnt good for him or me. | So, I FEEL yah sister. Coupla suggestions: "There's just [some] things time cannot mend." "Seeing each other would only break [break in italics] the fragile pieces we have put together [and] You would not want to see your place being filled by another." Also your first stanza is a bit confusing. On my first read I assumed we were talking about only one man, but then it turned into a tale of two men. Overall though good piece. Hope all goes well. --Kayla | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ] | its good but kind of confusing...almost kind of like its scattered around but still good | Brittany | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ] | |
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