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    dots Submission Name: Whiskey or Wine?dots
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    Author: shmurr
    ASL Info:    18 / male / maine
    Elite Ratio:    1.58 - 34/129/128
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 550
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 632



    Description:
       men want lust, woman want love


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    dotsWhiskey or Wine?dots
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    Whiskey or wine tonight?
    Love died inside her arms
    with the radio on
    waiting for a man to tell her good things,
    eyes on the doorway,
    his return will be equal to those in the movies.

    Whiskey or wine tonight?
    Staring from his window
    lust fell from his fingertips
    her radio on
    waiting for the woman on the couch
    to open her legs with approval.

    Whiskey or wine tonight?
    Busy fingers on broken hearts
    candles lit and beds made,
    she cries but accepts,
    because with the lion
    always comes the teeth.




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