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    dots Submission Name: coming homedots

    Author: beth freese
    ASL Info:    18.F.Earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 74/113/39
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       i might add to this but i'm not sure so for now this is it. it's about my aunt coming home yesterday. she had cancer and is still pretty sick. everything that could go wrong did pretty much(excluding dying) so she had to have a butload of surgerys and such. she lives in bahrain during the year but then they all come over here during the summer and she was finally able to make the trip.

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    dotscoming homedots

    Her frail body walked up those stairs
    Right off that plane from London
    There was no wheelchair
    She was full and upright
    With a huge smile on her face
    Ones like in movies and pictures
    But she always does so that was no surprise,
    Everyone smiled big,
    But no one has her smile
    Then she hugged, we hugged, everyone hugged,
    She had made it home
    Drains and all.

    Submitted on 2006-07-24 11:41:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm having a lot of illness in my family right now, so I know what this is like. I hope that a miracle happens, and she's ok. I think you need a comma after so in "But she always does so that was no surprise."

    You might want to share it with her, but I know a lot of my writes are to say the things I can't say, so it's your call.

    Nicely done,
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really good tribute to a woman who is filled with determination and a strong desire to survive
    I can guarantee you one of the biggest things keeping her Alive was the aLove of Family like you in her Life
    I do hope you share this write with her
    She would be so touched
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    I have just added two new writes
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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