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    dots Submission Name: I remember...dots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 733
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 917



    Description:
       my grandma pretty much hates me. read it and you'll get it.


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    dotsI remember...dots
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    I remember, when you used to love me, used to hug me, now you say, I don't visit you, but I do. I try. When I come, you only say I'm dumb, and annoying, and to never come again.

    You were there for me. Now you're getting married and I can hardly see, the real, you. Waiting, and breaking down, when will you come around to your senses?

    I miss you, what the hell? This isn't how a grandma's supposed to be, Why do you hate me? Then you yell when I don't come around? Well, why should I? I'd rather die, than be around you when you're like this. You were my shelter, run to you, now I hide from you.

    I'm sorry, but I guess it's mutual, I hate you.
    I don't want to, but it feels like you do, if you don't let me know.

    I remember, when you used to love me, used to hug me, I want, that, back.




    Submitted on 2006-07-24 16:01:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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