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    dots Submission Name: ** Your Realitydots
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    Author: Caotic_Disaster
    ASL Info:    16/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 447/349/148
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dots** Your Realitydots
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    I sit here watching
    Through the glass
    That seperates me
    From your reality
    The yelling, screaming
    And the dying inside
    That you live with
    Day after day
    Your passive mother
    Who sits with little sympathy
    As your controlling dad
    Takes little notice of your
    Breaking hearts, fallen life
    With which I want to help
    But I only run into a wall
    When I run towards
    Your reality.




    Submitted on 2006-07-24 16:29:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a good poem, well written and well good lol, i dont no wat else to say but keep writting and good job

    -Nick-
    | Posted on 2006-07-26 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]


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