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    dots Submission Name: Held Downdots

    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 302
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 895
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1721

       Im getting ready to break down barriers and doors.
    my life has be stagnated by indecision for a good time now. I feel its time to step it up, change the scenery....

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    dotsHeld Downdots

    Standing, elevated with words unspoken
    landing fixated on the world just hoping
    Devoured and decapitated in a swirl of token, I'm smoking
    Blunts with resin for power, thatís controlling
    Breathing the hatred poison like seeded flowers in the open invaded
    Toxins in a world not stated but I need to know who is related
    To lands of weed that keeps my hands at ease
    as a man to cease my goals, in my entire whole I see the toll
    pay it in full with a disease holding me down in control
    Forgetting the hour when Iím deceased with poison in my skull
    Fame is famished with disdain admonished in a soul untold
    Iím honest to keep this promise to claim patrol on this hold
    I keep tabs on the acid tabs letting the placid run
    I let the stabs seep then grab rapid to this gun
    One day in full sway I hope to fool the dismay
    Rather be in school today with scope to dull this way
    Of drugs and corrupt nature
    keep me going till my core is up to create my future
    Suture the dark with heavens glow
    after seven days I will start to grow
    Response to the stimuli of never changing
    Against irony of staying high to risk myself from maintaining
    first the thirst for content to sustain without blaming
    the worst part is that I got to be bent and cuss in vain cuz im hating
    What I be, through the eyes of a saint I wish I could see
    but life isnít free sometimes were denied the risk of trying or wanting to be
    someone else or be better off,
    cuz life is full of gloom
    why do I feel like the cost
    is me always running out of room

    Submitted on 2006-07-24 17:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ill [censored]. real hip hop intellegence. doesn't get any better than this. keep this [censored] up. cuz when the poetry starts to bore me i come to ur page for a little lyrical bliss. peace
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm.....When I was reading this it seemed as if I could really cling to those words. Making that effort to let as much truth out seemed almost overbearing seeing as somewhat of the writing makes me look back on myself. It kinda hurts, when reading it I got a burning feeling inside, like trying to hold somethin' back cause I'm mad at myself for mistakes. They seem like mistakes now and have pulled me down so far to where I don't think I have the strengh to face it. But...off the subject...sorry bout' that. I was pleased with the writing. I'd like to hear more of what you have to say.
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by canarddoue | [ Reply to This ]

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