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    dots Submission Name: Elastic Bands of Joyous Lust.dots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 345
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 922
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    Description:
        Warning - this poem contains Adult Content- umm This is the result of a poet war between me and a freind had to write in a male necro's point of view...


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    dotsElastic Bands of Joyous Lust.dots
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    Unsounded protest dumbfounded by proclaimed pain,
    Slowly I pull my mini tournaquets out of my Plastic bag.
    Like the touch of mother to dying child,
    I treat your bleading corspe like gods smiles.
    I take my golden elastic my Fav one at best,
    And gently cut him off of death.
    Your precious little god hard as a rock at least.laid in my hands,
    rubbing to your dying heart beats.
    I a fastidious youth still unpleased.
    Kissed your blood upon your cock the untaimed lust .
    Slowly sucking the taste of sweet flesh,
    From your bleeding carcass.
    I decided the time for pleasure was now,
    Dropping my pants with fast persision.
    Carefully I position his hard delicasy,
    In side me slowly starting to caress my senses.
    Rising and falling on his body like scampering ocean waves,
    Pushing hard into his warm waist to be more fulfilled.
    Sweat falling on to his red mutulated flesh,
    My heart beat racing in heat.
    Feeling him slide back and forth through me,
    Brought extacsy in to evey musle of my body.
    As I went further to full my rechied soul,
    My hand found itself to my own manhood,
    Grasping it so hard that it brought more pain,
    Which made me even harder then I thought possible.
    Peasing both sides of my pleasures at once.
    With swift movements of my hand I domanated myself,
    Into a god a self pleasure at others sacrifice I loved it.
    Groans wetted my lips as I started to fall into my morbid self.
    Grabing harder to surpass my needs and this creating,
    Moans of satisfaction poured out along with my seeds,
    I had truly gotten what I had wanted,
    And I fell apon his sweaty dirty cumed up body.
    Kissing my old friends lips goodbye,
    I removed my elasticband and put it in a Zipplock bag.
    I slowly dressed my self to an appoprait degree,
    Got up from my concrete bed of Passion,
    Holding my interment of preservation I strolled away.






    Submitted on 2006-07-24 17:24:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      holy fuuu..... thats what i almost said a bunch in my mind alot as i read it....haha. ive seriously secretly always wanted to write a poem like this. you really lured me in with that first line.... and then hit me with all that sexy dead stuff. pretty freakin awesome. so blatant and.... beautiful somehow.
    | Posted on 2006-12-29 00:00:00 | by forevermountain | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I.....I...absolutely LOVED IT!

    It was like you know when you see a movie you reallly like and you want to keep on your list of best-watched movies forever? This poem is so good, it's on that list, well my poem list not my movie list!

    ABOSLUTLEY LOVELY!

    Once I got what it was actually talking about I was like "ohhhh.....great" then I read it and it was so descriptive and soooo.....just great!

    AWESOME JOB! I'd give it 1000 out of 1000 points!
    Danni
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by BlueHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn i love the details in this.. Not that i do that kinda stuff. But it was really really good even with the small errors of punctuation.. Though I dont concern myself with that for real.. And neither should you.. I like the sickness in it. It made me want to read it again and to keep reading it.. Again i think this is one of my favorites and is gonna be added too.. I hope you win the bet.. Really.. Cuz i think you will.. Anyways, Again this is a good write/ Especially on this topic and the manner..

    -medicated

    (im the first to post. YEAH!)
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]
      theres a few things going on here.very descriptive for what its worth but i felt that as you were writing it you were thinking of something else aswell.
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]
      alright...
    after reading it thought it was well written.

    Twisted but yet elegant,
    if that makes any sense.

    the points of view of the poem seemed to change throughout but i probably should read it again before i point that out.

    the vocab was interesting and the torment of the 'joyous lust' seemed original enough for me..

    Good read
    Sincerely
    SIN
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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