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    dots Submission Name: Eversiodots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 971
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1633



    Description:
       This is an old poem about how my heart was killed by the one I thought I loved


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    dotsEversiodots
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    Opening my eyes for the first time to truth,
    Everything dark with lies and betrayal.
    Unsure if this world was true I built a barrier,
    to keep every out and myself in.

    I thought I was safe that I would not get hurt,
    You were nice to me, doing everything I believed to be true.
    You said you loved me, you said I would always be yours.
    Holding me close you would softly kiss me and tell me that we would always be like this.

    Soon I Barely saw you, finally I got scared and went to you,
    Only to see you with another.
    Telling her the same that you loved her and that you would hold her
    ...forever.
    You did not notice that day for I ran away in pain.
    The next time I saw you I told you that we could not see each other,
    Not anymore and that it was not you it was me.

    I thought you were gone never to be seen with my sore eyes.
    Now your back and its only fair I tell you the truth.
    You ask me why I won't give us another chance,

    Well this is why.

    You lied, cheated and betrayed me, you used me.
    Now to you I well Be Eversio,
    For It means forever and always.
    As in , You will never have me again for,
    I will remember forever how you hurt me.
    I will also never forgive you there for,
    I will always hate you.

    To you I will remain Eversio, Because I won't forget.
    I will always think about how you hurt me.
    So I shall remain Eversio and remember forever




    Submitted on 2006-07-24 18:51:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey I learned a new word, LOL.

    Anyways, good strong write.
    | Posted on 2006-07-25 00:00:00 | by EseanB | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has some raw emotions and in some parts it looks like you're...reflecting. That's good it brings the piece to 'live'. I liked the way you used Eversio in the setences and explained it and all. I could also relate to it, in some parts.
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with Foreseer.. That it does have raw emotion.. I reread it before i commented it cuz it's so much easier when you look at it on here rather than AIM.. lol.. It is very beautiful yet sad.. And i dont think you should have ever had to feel that much pain from the [censored] head.. lol. Again "Eversio" is a very very Wicked name that has a touch of "elegance" to it.. Again great write!.

    -medicated
    | Posted on 2006-07-24 00:00:00 | by medicated | [ Reply to This ]


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